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Donny Ke Karnamey | Part 6: Saari saari raat jhaagun main! pg 10

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PostSubject: Donny Ke Karnamey | Part 6: Saari saari raat jhaagun main! pg 10   Fri Mar 06, 2009 11:19 am

This fanfic is based on a cartoon named Donny.
Check out the tiny promo!

Ek ladka tha deewana sa,
Chappal le kar phirta tha
Nazarein jhuka ke
'Blush' karke!!!
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Chappal mein jaane kya kya dekha karta tha
Kuch karna tha shayad usko
Par jaane kis se darta tha
:batting eyelashes:batting eyelashes:batting eyelashes

Jab bhi milta tha mujhse
Yehi poochha karta tha
Yeh taste kaise karta hai?
Yeh taste kaise karta hai?
love struck:love struck:love struck:


aur main... sirf yehi keh pati thi
Marrda vi nahi gurr khaake...
*smacks with chappal*


Part 1 - Never Argue with a Woman! | Page 2
Part 2 - Is it fate? | Page 3
Part 3: Hum Saat Aat Hain? | Page 6
Part 4: Bahon mein chale aao! | page 7
Part 5: Aaj ki shaam, hona hai kya? | page 8
Part 6: Saari saari raat jhaagun main! | page 10

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PostSubject: Re: Donny Ke Karnamey | Part 6: Saari saari raat jhaagun main! pg 10   Fri Mar 06, 2009 1:30 pm

Dunno whether to blush or laugh.. :'>:'>:'>:'>:'>:'>

But last night when you told me to read this just couldn't stop laughing...after long laughed really hard... Happy) Happy) Happy)

But everytime read it...its just hillarious...especially the last line...that gurr khaake one.. :rolling on the floor :rolling on the floor :rolling on the floor

Great start... :-bd...you know, didn't expect you to actually go ahead with this.. :'>:'>
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PostSubject: Re: Donny Ke Karnamey | Part 6: Saari saari raat jhaagun main! pg 10   Fri Mar 06, 2009 7:53 pm

Lolz :rolling on the floor :rolling on the floor:rolling on the floor:rolling on the floor:rolling on the floor i cant stop laffing yaar :rolling on the floor :rolling on the floor
thats an awesum start henna..
looking forward to the story of deewana ladka :batting eyelashes

and donny..kabhi toh give instantaneous reply..always writing 'brb' Happy)
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PostSubject: Re: Donny Ke Karnamey | Part 6: Saari saari raat jhaagun main! pg 10   Sat Mar 07, 2009 1:10 am

haha lolz!!!donny.......tayar raho she ain't going to spare yu.... :rolling on the floor
kher..grt start henna :-bd !!
MAN...I CAN'T STOP ...MASLF
bohut hassi ari hai.....
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PostSubject: Re: Donny Ke Karnamey | Part 6: Saari saari raat jhaagun main! pg 10   Sat Mar 07, 2009 4:28 am

@Amrit: brb has to say na... blush karne gaya hoga... Happy) good to see you rolling amrit... I wonder what the others on yahoo will be like when reading it...

@Reebz: thanks a lot reebz... that was the intention to make all laugh.. Happy) mission accomplished! :wink:
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PostSubject: Re: Donny Ke Karnamey | Part 6: Saari saari raat jhaagun main! pg 10   Sat Mar 07, 2009 8:50 am

haa looking forward to ek ladka ka deewana
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PostSubject: Re: Donny Ke Karnamey | Part 6: Saari saari raat jhaagun main! pg 10   Sat Mar 07, 2009 10:26 am

looollllzzzz
:rolling on the floor Happy)))
haha
amazingg
henny darlingg do continue!!
promo tho interestingg hai!!!
donny.....beware!!!!!
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PostSubject: Re: Donny Ke Karnamey | Part 6: Saari saari raat jhaagun main! pg 10   Sat Mar 07, 2009 11:54 am

:rolling on the floor :rolling on the floor :rolling on the floor cant wait to read d ff :rolling on the floor :rolling on the floor :rolling on the floor
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PostSubject: Re: Donny Ke Karnamey | Part 6: Saari saari raat jhaagun main! pg 10   Mon Mar 09, 2009 10:34 am

lolz this is halirious and funnyy
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PostSubject: Re: Donny Ke Karnamey | Part 6: Saari saari raat jhaagun main! pg 10   Wed Mar 11, 2009 4:12 pm

Part 1: Never Argue with a Woman!
It’s a bright sunny day! As the college bus travels down the busy, noisy road its passengers create mayhem. Amongst all the enthusiastic chatter and shuffling there’s just one student sat quietly, glued to the window seat.

Manically he chants to himself ‘agla stop uska stop hai!’ He turns to look at the seat beside him. It’s empty with the exception of his bag laying carelessly on it. He dreamily looks back out of the window, when his dreamland is interrupted with a light slap to the back of his head.

Annoyed he turns and looks at the devils sitting behind. The girls laugh at his simpleness. ‘Kya hai Saara?’ he asks the girl that just slapped him angrily. She answers back with an innocent tone, ‘kuch nahi Donny!’ She batters her eyelashes purposefully acknowledging her success at irritating her twin brother. ‘phir maara kyun?’ retorts Donny.

Both soon get into a huge argument. Mean whilst the bus stops and some more students get on. Amongst them is the special person that Donny had been waiting for ever since he’d left his house hurriedly earlier that morning. Unfortunately, college students being the janwars they are, rush past the girl to find seats for themselves.

A motti ladki waddles her way down the aisle and sees that the seat next to Donny is empty. She straightens her heavy black framed glasses and blushes softly. ‘lagta hai aaj mera lucky day hai, Donny COMB ke paas baitne ka moka… haye!’ Trying her best not to faint she moves towards Donny and plonks herself onto Donny’s bag. She stares endlessly at him. He stops arguing. ‘Henna aagayi hai tumhe baad mein will see Saara ki bachii!!’ He turns back and looks over at the person sitting besides him. Shocked he stares back at her.

Blushing the girl looks away. ‘I hope you don’t mind na, mere ko aur koi jugah nahi dikhi, toh idhar ich aake bait gayi!’ she giggles nervously, trying her best to mimic the tapori style that Donny sometimes speaks in.

Utterly shocked Donny replies, ‘KYA? Kitni saari seats kaali thi!’ Saara can’t help but add her two cents. ‘Donny ab bait hi gayi hai toh kya hua? uski company enjoy karo, aur erm… apne bag ko find karo…’ Just at that moment Donny realizes his bag was on that seat.

‘eh, mere saare phoolon ko kharab kar diya! Uttho’ frustrated he pulls his squashed bag out from under her. Holding his head he looks out of the window for a change of ‘scenery’. ‘Sorry haan!’ the girl worriedly whispers. She tries to converse with Donny, ‘waise yeh phool mere liye teh na?’

Donny looks at her coldly, he takes the mashed up roses out from his bag and hands them over. ‘Rakh loh, lunch mein khaa lehna!’ he sighs and looks away. ‘wow! Thank you Donnyyy’ she exclaims ecstatically. Amazed at her luck she holds the rose’s tight n smells them.


Forgetting how awful the morning ride to college has become Donny remembers he was waiting for Henna. Eagerly he looks around – but doesn’t see her. His heart sinks, ‘aaj nahi aayi ho kya?’ he says to himself quietly.

He glimpses around once more, still no luck. Henna on the other hand is sat right at the front on the bus, sharing a seat with two other students, squashed tightly into a corner. ‘Yeh bus mein itni kam jugah kyun hoti hai?’ she groans as the bus takes another sharp turn and the students sitting besides her come charging into her ribs.

Donny is also feeling uncomfortable, saving his izzat he decides to stand in the aisle instead. ‘Excuse me behen ji’ he mutters as he holds his breath and moves out from where he was once comfortably sat. He swings his bag over his shoulder and holds onto the rail nearby tightly. ‘Allah kare ab college jaldi aa jaye.’ He prays. Saara laughs devilishly at Donny and continues talking to the girls around her.

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PostSubject: Re: Donny Ke Karnamey | Part 6: Saari saari raat jhaagun main! pg 10   Thu Mar 12, 2009 1:13 am

amazing write up henna :=D>
kitna different hai from the first synopsis..loved it Grin:
donny is really one woman man..cant even sit with another..thats really good :flower:
and that 'saving his izzat' line is too funny :rolling on the floor
keep up :-bd
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PostSubject: Re: Donny Ke Karnamey | Part 6: Saari saari raat jhaagun main! pg 10   Thu Mar 12, 2009 2:22 am

^ yes, the promo was the general overview na. Uss mein exaggerated the characters personality to describe them without the usual lamba choda description people give of characters in book.

... back to a more gently reality now. Happy)

Writing something after ages... hope it was ok!
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PostSubject: Re: Donny Ke Karnamey | Part 6: Saari saari raat jhaagun main! pg 10   Thu Mar 12, 2009 2:51 am

:'>:'>:'>:'>:'>:'>:'>:'>:'>:'>:'>:'>:'>:'>:'>:'>

Just cudn't stop blushing and grinning...reading through the first part... :'>:Wink):'>

Well written by the way...:=D>:=D>:=D>:=D>...at least kept read with interest until the end... :Wink):'>

Didn't expect a motti girl ki entry at all...that was sort of surprising... :Wink)...plus she ruining my roses...:-O...possessive about my roses...you know na :'>

Btw...bus tha ya truck jo i cudnt even see Henna? :broken heart ...Sink kar kar ke heart would have drowned.... :'>:'> :Wink) :'>:'>
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PostSubject: Re: Donny Ke Karnamey | Part 6: Saari saari raat jhaagun main! pg 10   Thu Mar 12, 2009 5:51 am

aaww hehehe Happy)))
**cute**
moti grl ko Donny COMB k saath bethne ka mauqa!!!
lolllzzzzz
hilarious....sooperb...
cont asap!!
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PostSubject: Re: Donny Ke Karnamey | Part 6: Saari saari raat jhaagun main! pg 10   Thu Mar 12, 2009 4:18 pm

very good
after a long time i have seen u writing it it really good
i can imagine donny in this
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PostSubject: Re: Donny Ke Karnamey | Part 6: Saari saari raat jhaagun main! pg 10   Fri Mar 13, 2009 12:20 am

OMG Henna...I m seeing u writing a ff after ages now...bt wht a start...

Bechara Donny.....
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PostSubject: Re: Donny Ke Karnamey | Part 6: Saari saari raat jhaagun main! pg 10   Fri Mar 13, 2009 1:38 am

lol.gif" alt="lol!" longdesc="38" /> henna......amazing man!!!!!!!
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PostSubject: Re: Donny Ke Karnamey | Part 6: Saari saari raat jhaagun main! pg 10   Fri Mar 13, 2009 7:38 am

wht a great wrtie up henna!!!!!!!!!! its fantabulous :=D> :-bd
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PostSubject: Re: Donny Ke Karnamey | Part 6: Saari saari raat jhaagun main! pg 10   Fri Mar 13, 2009 2:41 pm

wow that was great Henna!
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PostSubject: Re: Donny Ke Karnamey | Part 6: Saari saari raat jhaagun main! pg 10   Sun Mar 15, 2009 1:12 pm

lol that was just fantastic! i laughed when the moti girl came and sat down next to him. great part!! Happy

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PostSubject: Re: Donny Ke Karnamey | Part 6: Saari saari raat jhaagun main! pg 10   Sun Mar 15, 2009 8:17 pm

Donny sire...!!Aapke karnaamon ki bhi jai ho..!!
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PostSubject: Re: Donny Ke Karnamey | Part 6: Saari saari raat jhaagun main! pg 10   Mon Mar 16, 2009 5:43 pm

thanks for all the appreciation everyone... means a lot... :batting eyelashes the next part steps away from the humour though to focus on the story a little more. :wink:

I'm sure you'll find it just as enjoyable. Especially those of you that enter the story.
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PostSubject: Re: Donny Ke Karnamey | Part 6: Saari saari raat jhaagun main! pg 10   Mon Mar 16, 2009 5:50 pm

Part 2: Is it fate?

Soon the bus screeches to a sharp halt. The students start to pour out of the bus slowly, groaning at the hard day’s work that lies ahead of them. Donny starts making his way off the bus too. ‘Apun bhi aa rahi-le’ the motti girl calls out. Donny doesn’t bother looking back. He straightens out his bag and steps off the bus, taking a deep breath of fresh air.

‘eh side pe…’ Saara moves all in her path out of the way, including the motti ladki. She walks out of the bus untouched by the surrounding students, her friends follow. Quickly she paces up to Donny before he disappears beyond the college gates. ‘Donny sunno,’ she stops short in front of donny; ‘bhai, aaj toh bus ka mazza leh liya… kal se hum car mein ya bike pe aayenge acha?’

‘kyun? Bus mein kya kharabi hai?’ questions Donny. Loosing patience she answers back! ‘Tumhari bike mein kya kharabi hai????’ Donny moving Saara out of his way quietly mutters, ‘Uski pichli seat pe tum jo baiti ho… woh nahi.’ He walks off leaving Saara shocked and angry. ‘Samajhta kya hai apne aap ko!’

Meanwhilst the bell rings and the clusters of students swarming the corridors begin to fade into classrooms leaving the corridors empty once again. Rushed and totally exhausted Henna lets herself fall into the comfort of her chair. The girl sitting besides watches, ‘phir se late?’ she giggles. ‘Nahi, aaj toh on time Amrit’ Henna points out on her watch. ‘Improving yaar ahista ahista!’ Amrit notes. The class begins and all listen attentively.

Until another girl taps Henna from behind. ‘Hey Nits’ Henna answers without looking back. ‘Hi Henna, report likhli hai na?’ she enquires. Before Henna can answer she continues. ‘Maine nahi likhi, woh kya hai na kal shaam kidnap dekhte dekhte Imran ne mujhe kidnap kar liya!’

Henna looks over at Amrit, ‘Iska matlab hai movie dekhte dekhte so gayi’ sighing gently Henna turns and faces Nits. ‘Oye tujhe kitni baar kaha hai apne jeej ke baare mein aise na socha kar…’ Amrit giggles to herself, watching the usual argument between Henna and Nits over Imran Khan.

‘Jaane jaan dhoondta phir raha... hoon tumhe raat din...main yahan se wahan’ :'>love struck: Donny sings softly as he strolls down the empty corridors. ‘Mujhko awaaz doh chup gaye ho sanam… tum kahan?’ he sighs as he drags himself to a nearby bench. ‘Itni mushkil se toh naam pata chala tha, ladki hai ya bhootni. Ek baar dikhne ke baad gayab!’ he mutters displeased.

First year of college had just started a week ago, all had been going smoothly for Donny until he had noticed her two days ago. Unable to resist, he had attempted to follow her home but, lost her midway in the crowed streets soon after she had gotten of the college bus. He’d laid awake the whole night that day, thinking when he’d see her again, if he’d ever see her again! Tossing and turning he had eagerly waited for the next day to come so that he could seek her out. Unfruitfully he had only managed to find out her name. He wasn’t even sure if that was her name. Only what he had been able to describe to others led him to believe she was Henna.

Lost in his own world Donny sat on the bench for quite some time thinking. He thought and thought and thought. ‘Kahan ho tum Henna!’ he said with a slight annoyance in his voice. ‘Henna’ he repeated. A blushing redness overcame his soft pale cheeks as he repeated her name, his voice softening without him realizing.

Overwhelmed by the feeling he didn’t perceive the buzzer sounding to indicate the next period was about to start. Students once again cluttered the hallway.

‘Amrit I’ll see you wahin lockers ke paas iss class ke baad acha’ Henna informed as she left to attend her next class. Amrit nodded in agreement as she too started to walk in the opposite direction towards her next class. Confused by the loud racket and overcrowding in the corridors Amrit trips over n her books fly everywhere.

‘Oops, I’m so sorry’ Donny bends down to help Amrit. ‘Woh have habit of stretching na, meri mommy bhi tells me off… long legs jo… have na…’ donny stammers trying to apologise and explain at the same time. He helps Amrit up. ‘Lagi toh nahi na?’ he asks worriedly. ‘I’m fine’ Amrit assures him.

Without noticing he starts walking Amrit to her class holding her books. He introduces himself and Amrit acknowledges she’s heard of him. Donny tugs his collars feeling proud of his fame. ‘Meri class aagayi’ she puts her hands out to take her books. Donny moves them away. He reads her name from it and looks at her. ‘Nice to meet you, Amrit!’ He hands back her books. Amrit smiles and enters her class.

Donny walks back down the corridor and spots a paper on the floor where Amrit had fell. ‘Yeh toh ussi ka hoga’ he walks over n picks it up. ‘mujhe yeh usse waapis dehna chahiye.’

Little does Donny know the paper in his hand actually belongs to Henna. She had lent her notes to Amrit. Holding the paper that’s been carefully folded in half Donny walks back towards Amrit’s class to return it.

Will he give away the clue that could lead him to Henna unsuspectingly?

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PostSubject: Re: Donny Ke Karnamey | Part 6: Saari saari raat jhaagun main! pg 10   Mon Mar 16, 2009 8:53 pm

yes yes its fate! Grin: donny jaldi se bhaago towards the class :Wink)
this was amazing part henna :-bd :=D> :=D>
u've written is perfectly..jus loved it (aur kaafi lamba bhi likha hai..so loved it double love struck: )

n donny saying :
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ladki hai ya bhootni. Ek baar dikhne k baad gayab

:rolling on the floor :rolling on the floor :rolling on the floor :rolling on the floor :rolling on the floor awesum !
n his ever so helping nature..im sure ghoomte ghumate wo Henna tak pahunch hi jayega :Wink) (only agar wo moti ladki fir se beech mein na aa jaye.. donny usko pehle se thikaane lagwa doh)

waiting for the nxt part Grin:
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PostSubject: Re: Donny Ke Karnamey | Part 6: Saari saari raat jhaagun main! pg 10   Tue Mar 17, 2009 12:57 am

Wow JB...2 parts gone aur mujhe ab is FF ka pata chalaa :#-o .....really excellent intro and the parts which follow are just amazing....I especially love the moti lady irritating Donny scene :Wink) & the Henna-ke-khayalon-main-khoya-hua-Donny scene :Wink: - - -yeh tho is nothing new, uski haalat hamesha aisi hi hoti hai!!! :Wink) ....can't wait for the next part...just hope Amu kabab main haddi na bane!!! love struck_X
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