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Donny Ke Karnamey | Part 6: Saari saari raat jhaagun main! pg 10 |
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Henna
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Subject: Re: Donny Ke Karnamey | Part 6: Saari saari raat jhaagun main! pg 10 Tue Mar 17, 2009 2:25 am |
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@Amrit- love the way you're always reading with enthusiasm yaar.. ) glad you're still pleased...
@Rahila- Heyy!! Welcomes and thanks a lot yaar... I guess, you'll just have to wait a little for the story to unravel to find out kaun kaisa hai...
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Amrit
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Subject: Re: Donny Ke Karnamey | Part 6: Saari saari raat jhaagun main! pg 10 Tue Mar 17, 2009 2:56 am |
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- Rah wrote:
- just hope Amu kabab main haddi na bane!!! _X
kya yaar.. kaisi baatein kar rahi ho : u toh know my love for mahi na :) n have faith in donny..wo toh Miss Universe ki taraf bhi na dekhe agar wo Henna na ho :)
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-AreenA-
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Subject: Re: Donny Ke Karnamey | Part 6: Saari saari raat jhaagun main! pg 10 Tue Mar 17, 2009 6:11 am |
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: ) ) OMG!!! luvd it yaara...ur awesumm at dis hehehehe amu nd nitz ki entry.... haha aur kaun kaun's gonna enter?? hehehe luvd it...lyk..completely yaar!!! updt asap acha??
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Verni
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Subject: Re: Donny Ke Karnamey | Part 6: Saari saari raat jhaagun main! pg 10 Tue Mar 17, 2009 1:47 pm |
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wowwwww henna...... the ff is awesome... at least I smiled and laughed in the oments of tension... hehe... luved it....... Everyone's entry, timing is just perfect....
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Donny
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Subject: Re: Donny Ke Karnamey | Part 6: Saari saari raat jhaagun main! pg 10 Thu Mar 19, 2009 12:17 pm |
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This is turning out extremely well... :'>:'>:'>:'>:'>:'>:'>:'>:'>
Everything has been described extremely well..and you hav kept a perfect balance of everything literally in terms of emotions and humour....and all..
Can actually visualise each n every word you have written...
Plus the suspense or excitement factor to keep us all hooked to ur FF...all mixed perfectly...jis point pe u end makes me really curious..:)
- amrit23 wrote:
- n have faith in donny..wo toh Miss Universe ki taraf bhi na dekhe agar wo Henna na ho :)
: : : : : : LMAOO...amrit didi...aap bhi na... :'>
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Amby
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Subject: Re: Donny Ke Karnamey | Part 6: Saari saari raat jhaagun main! pg 10 Fri Mar 20, 2009 5:40 am |
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: : : : : : awesome story!!!!!! loll im on the flooorr..lolllllllllllllllllllllll donny n saara are twins LOL!! n that moti sitting beside donny hahahahhahaha..: cant wait for nxt part.. you write soo welll..too good..chachiii good going.. :\:d/
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Prii_Loves_Mohit
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Subject: Re: Donny Ke Karnamey | Part 6: Saari saari raat jhaagun main! pg 10 Fri Mar 20, 2009 7:28 am |
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wow amazing work Henna! do continue
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xxreeBzxx
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Subject: Re: Donny Ke Karnamey | Part 6: Saari saari raat jhaagun main! pg 10 Sun Mar 22, 2009 9:54 am |
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hahaha extremly well henna..... : i jst lovd it!! )
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*Resham*
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Subject: Re: Donny Ke Karnamey | Part 6: Saari saari raat jhaagun main! pg 10 Tue Mar 24, 2009 12:41 am |
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Donny jaldi se bhaago.... Hey kewl update henna
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Rohini
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Subject: Re: Donny Ke Karnamey | Part 6: Saari saari raat jhaagun main! pg 10 Thu Mar 26, 2009 4:19 am |
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OMGG!!! the funniest FF I ever read in my whole lyf
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Prii_Loves_Mohit
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Subject: Re: Donny Ke Karnamey | Part 6: Saari saari raat jhaagun main! pg 10 Thu Mar 26, 2009 5:42 pm |
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thats funny
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nitya
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Subject: Re: Donny Ke Karnamey | Part 6: Saari saari raat jhaagun main! pg 10 Wed Apr 01, 2009 10:29 am |
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great part henna waiting fr next part
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kj_lrl
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Subject: Re: Donny Ke Karnamey | Part 6: Saari saari raat jhaagun main! pg 10 Sat Apr 04, 2009 6:13 am |
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My Godddddddd.. It cant be moreee funnt than it is.. .gif" alt="!" longdesc="38" /> . Lovelyyy chap luveddd the Inro esp.
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Simplicity
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Subject: Re: Donny Ke Karnamey | Part 6: Saari saari raat jhaagun main! pg 10 Sun Apr 05, 2009 11:25 am |
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Hey Bhaggu.... Had a time reading it... havent finished both the chapters though wud read it asap laughter dose indeed!!
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Henna
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Subject: Re: Donny Ke Karnamey | Part 6: Saari saari raat jhaagun main! pg 10 Mon Apr 06, 2009 4:04 am |
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Thanks for all the appreciation mansioneers!!
glad you're having fun reading this light-hearted comedy... nice too see a lot of new faces around here!
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Henna
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Subject: Re: Donny Ke Karnamey | Part 6: Saari saari raat jhaagun main! pg 10 Sat Apr 11, 2009 8:33 am |
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Part 3: Hum Saat Aat Hain?
‘Donnyyyyyy!!!!’ yells a voice far down the corridor. Donny stops in his tracks and turns to see where the voice came from. A tall, fair, neatly dressed guy is stood poking his head out of a classroom. ‘chal jaldi aa na, class shuru hone wali hai!’ he exclaims. ‘ Aa raha hoon yaar!’ Donny says, retreating back towards the classroom. He puts the paper in his bag for safe keeping.
Donny walks into the classroom unrushed and sits besides the guy that had called him. ‘Woh nahi mil rahi mujhe Eijoo.’ Donny sighs helplessly. Eijaz nicknamed Eijoo was a close friend whom Donny shared many secrets with. He was a thoughtful guy with a great amount of wisdom. Although, his dashing looks and ‘fan-following’ i.e. the girls in college, lead him to be slightly arrogant. Eijaz soothingly rests his hand on Donny’s shoulder and tells him to be patient. ‘Mil jayegi, don’t worry.’ He nods encouragingly.
Slowly Donny takes out his books and pens one by one. He doesn’t notice the teacher staring. ‘Aap ready hogaye hain tum hum shuru karein?’ the teacher remarks sarcastically. Donny looks up – snapping out of his slow, dreamy mood. He hears everyone laughing. A redness overcomes his pale cheeks. ‘Ji nahi sir, abhi toh aapki motti textbook nahi mil rahi mujhe. Lagta hai ghar pe bhool aaya hoon… agar aap wait karne ko tayyar hain toh main lehke aaon?’ Donny questions mockingly.
‘Khud ko leh aaye ho yehi bohat badi baat hai!’ The teacher shakes his head and mutters to himself, ‘aaj kal ki generation… yeh banenge humara future?’ He starts his lesson after advising Donny to share a textbook with someone.
Soon class is dismissed for lunch. Everyone rushes hurriedly towards the college canteen whilst others that are hungrier litter the corridors with their lunch boxes. Henna is stood by the lockers waiting for Amrit. Donny and Eijaz walk past, busy in their own conversation as they walk towards the canteen. Donny stops suddenly. ‘Henna!!’ he says with his eyes wide open and looks back towards the lockers as quickly as he can manage. Eijaz laughs at him, ‘din mein bhi sapne? Koi ladki nahi hai wahan!’ Donny scans the area near the lockers again – he blushes as he messes his hair up slightly. ‘Silly me…’ Both walk off to the canteen laughing. Meanwhilst, the crowd of boys that had gathered in front of the lockers disperses. Henna is still stood there waiting.
The canteen as usual is overcrowded and noisy. This isn’t a problem for Eijaz and Donny as they have a permanent booking for the tables near the huge glass window overlooking the college playing fields. In short the best spot is theirs. They walk towards the table to find Saara and a few friends sitting there. Saara stops and stares at Eijaz who in return winks at her. Donny lightly punches Eijaz on his stomach seeing this. ‘Kya kar raha hai?’ he asks Eijaz shaking his head. They pull a few more chairs up to the table and join the girls.
Saara starts talking non-stop. Alongside Saara are sat the other two college Diva’s – Ankita and Ekta. They’re known to the whole college by the names Anku and Eks. They treat Donny as their brother as Donny treats all Saara’s friends as his sisters. He refers to them quite cutely as being his ‘didi’s’. The story is quite the opposite for Eijaz who absolutely hates the thought of being anyone’s brother. ‘Pata nahi doosre doh kahan reh gaye’ Eks wonders too herself. She searches for Gaurav (Khanna) and Arjun (Bijlani).
‘Amrit, ab aa rahi hai?’ Henna asks pulling a long sad face. ‘Yaar woh Nits aur Verni ko bhi toh pick up karna tha na.’ she points behind her towards them. Henna leans to the side to take a look. ‘Hey guys!’ henna smiles. Verni comes and gives Henna a hug, being her sentimental self. ‘Verni tu toh aise mil rahi hai jaise ki kal nahi pichle saal mile teh last.’ Henna jokes. Moving away Verni explain, ‘kal mile ho ya pichle saal, ache se hamesha milna chahiye.’
Nits adds her take to the conversation. ‘Lunch time mein toh food se milna chahiye na’ All look at Nits and laugh. ‘Chalo chalein, Nits kahin hume na khaa jaye!’ Amrit giggles. They make their move towards the canteen. ‘Aaj ka special dish kya hoga?’ Nits wonders.
After a whole load of pushing and pulling the girls manage to get their lunch only to find that there are no tables vacant. ‘Ab kya karein hum?’ Amrit asks disappointedly. ‘Neeche baitke kha lehte hain na, main toh bohat hi hungry hoon’ Nits explains. All look at Nits weirdly. Verni sighs ‘neeche baitne ke liye bhi koi jugah hai kya jo neeche baitke khaa lein? It’s just jam packed.’
Henna is stood holding her tray of food quietly, staring into the distance. Amrit nudges her, ‘Henna, batao na kya karein?’ ‘Follow me girls!’ Henna says leading the way. ‘par jaa kahan rahe hai?’ Verni asks worriedly. ‘hamesha iss ladki ko koi ajeeb hi idea aata hai.’ Unwillingly Verni follows the others.
‘Andar jugah nahi hai lehkin bahar bohat jugah hai’ Henna explains as they walk onto the playing fields. ‘baito sab na, itna acha din hai toh bahar baitke khaane mein aur mazza aayega na?’ Amrit smiles a huge warm smile seeing the sun shining brightly. She sits on the grass alongside Henna. ‘Haan sach mein Henna yahan toh baat hi kuch aur hai!’ Verni adds as all tuck into their lunch dumping their bags carelessly besides them.
Gazing out of the canteen window Anku starts laughing. All seated at the table look at her. ‘Tujhe kya hua?’ Eijaz enquires. ‘Unn namunon ko dekho! Bahar lunch kar rahe hain!’ Anku points at Henna and the others sitting outside, enjoying their lunch. Eijaz looks out and bursts into laughter too. Donny looks at them both. ‘Kyun doosron ka mazzak udhate ho? Canteen mein jugah nahi mili hogi.’ Saara slaps Donny on his arm. ‘Kitna unhappening bhai I have!’ she mutters trying to see out the window. Donny doesn’t care to look instead he finishes off Saara’s slice of chocolate cake whilst she is busy prying into others business.
‘Yahan ek aur ke liye jugah hai henna?’ asks a deep gorgeous voice. Henna looks up half blinded by the sun shining brightly in her eyes. She uses her hand to shade them. ‘Hussainnnn’ she gasps, totally surprised. ‘sure, aao baito.’ She moves over and makes space for him. ‘Guys inse milo…’ Henna introduces Hussain to the rest of the group.
Back inside the canteen the jasoos are busy watching. ‘Arre yeh chikna kyun inke saath bait raha hai?’ Anku says frustrated by the fact. ‘Kyun baita hai hume kya, kaun hai yeh… isse hume matlab hona chahiye!’ Eks exclaims completely bowled over by the stranger.
Finally giving in Donny gives in to the temptation to look out of the window. ‘Tum log bhi na bas don’t stop. Unn becharon ke peeche haath dhoke padh gayi ho’ Donny glances out of the window. His jaw drops wide open. ‘Hennaaaaaaaaaa’ he screams. The whole canteen stops for a moment to see what happened. Saara gives all in the canteen an angry look and all turn away and pretend to mind their own business.
Donny notices the guy sitting besides her, talking and laughing. He lowers his eye brows in temper. ‘yeh kyun uske paas baita hua hai????’
‘Kaunsi Henna hai yaar?’ Eijaz enquires. He looks over at Donny for a response but it’s too late. Donny’s already gone.
Where’s Donny gone? And who is this Hussain?
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-AreenA-
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Subject: Re: Donny Ke Karnamey | Part 6: Saari saari raat jhaagun main! pg 10 Sat Apr 11, 2009 8:55 am |
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hehehehehe i kno wheres donny!!! lolzz awesum part!! arey vaah verni nd nitz here 2!!! hehe cute... aww eijjoo nd hussain bhi hain.... mera bijlani bhi!!! dats sumthingg im REALLY lukingg forward to! so updt nxt part asap!! dis was a complete package!! fab part!
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Amrit
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Subject: Re: Donny Ke Karnamey | Part 6: Saari saari raat jhaagun main! pg 10 Sat Apr 11, 2009 9:36 am |
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awesum yaar '' '' hussain n eijaz bhi..didnt expect them to in the ff..but their entry is surley rocking ':-bd' abhi se hi i see a love triangle buliding up '' '' '' '' omg..its gonna b hilarious as everything progresses ''
keep writing yaar..aise ache modh pe u leave the story cant wait na..uff..kitna intzaar karna padega 'blush' but im sure the wait will b worth it
n i simply loved it..especially the way u've written it '' ekdum sahi description.. waiting for the next part yaar..jaldi likhna 'dream'
(jus want to tell this ff's donny : plz apna first impression acha banana 'O:-)' )
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Donny
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Subject: Re: Donny Ke Karnamey | Part 6: Saari saari raat jhaagun main! pg 10 Sat Apr 11, 2009 10:55 am |
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A really longgg part....i guess amrit didi wud be the happiest person to see this... ')'
Again...very well written.. 'clap' 'clap' 'clap' ...surprised to see so many new entries...esp Eijoo, Gaurav and Arjun...dey came as a surprise.. ')' ')' ...and Hussain... '' ...next time keep him away from Henna acha....let him roam around all my didi's... 'blush' ')'
Waiting anxiously for the next part as i wanna noe...how is Hussain related to henna... '' '' '' '' '' .... ')'
@ Amrit Didi: Yaar mera impression mere haath mein hota toh...i wud hv made sure acha hi ho...iss FF mein toh henna ke haath mein hai... ')' ')' ...i'm sure she will make it aur bhi acha... 'blush'
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*Resham*
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Subject: Re: Donny Ke Karnamey | Part 6: Saari saari raat jhaagun main! pg 10 Sat Apr 11, 2009 11:14 am |
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OMGG...this one was hilarious stuff henna.... .gif" alt="!" longdesc="38" /> Donny...jealous of Hussain...not good.....loved the entries of the characters soon and sudden :cheers: ...ha ha Keep it up
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nitya
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Subject: Re: Donny Ke Karnamey | Part 6: Saari saari raat jhaagun main! pg 10 Mon Apr 13, 2009 10:08 am |
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omg henna hussein here nd ejaz :cheers: :cheers:
donny ko zalan
mee toattly foody u all a made :shock: :: :: :: :: cont soon
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poorvi
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Subject: Re: Donny Ke Karnamey | Part 6: Saari saari raat jhaagun main! pg 10 Mon Apr 13, 2009 2:09 pm |
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awwssoommee part hennaa
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Henna
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Subject: Re: Donny Ke Karnamey | Part 6: Saari saari raat jhaagun main! pg 10 Mon Apr 13, 2009 4:52 pm |
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@Areena: really? you know where donny is?... tell me... thank you for the appriciation and encouragement to write to this part. '' yeh.. quite a few good-looking entries this time!
@Amrit: fantastic to see you rolling ')' I know you'd be the one to enjoy a HD-Hu triangle the most ')' Ab modh pe chodna padta hai na yaar nahi toh you guys won't keep coming back na... good to see you enjoying urself here.. donny kya karta hai kya nahi yeh toh you'll have to wait n see...
@Donny: aagaye aap? ''... hussain se tumhari personal dushmani hai I know lehkin thoda control karlo acha... btw hu can come as close as he likes... tum kya kar lohge '' I know tumhe sab se zyada agle part ka intezaar hai... ache se will make u wait... don't worry! ''
@Reshu: yup a lot of characters in one go... I hope i haven't lost anyone. Just wanted to establish whose who before we get into the essence of the story...
@Nits: I know you're waiting for osami jeej ki entry yaar... but kya karun... there's no terrorist plot in this kahani na... you just sit back and enjoy with something to eat!
@Poorvi: jumping?... ')' thnks for reading...
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Amrit
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Subject: Re: Donny Ke Karnamey | Part 6: Saari saari raat jhaagun main! pg 10 Mon Apr 13, 2009 10:34 pm |
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- Henna wrote:
- @Nits: I know you're waiting for osami jeej ki entry yaar...
haww..inko toh main bhool hi gayi thi '' '' nittu u r happy with him na?
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Tomato
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Subject: Re: Donny Ke Karnamey | Part 6: Saari saari raat jhaagun main! pg 10 Tue Apr 14, 2009 8:36 am |
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Awesome awesome simply awesome work Hennu !!!!
You write soooooooooooooo well....n I just love the way u describe Donny blushing '' '' '' '' '' ''
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